Revision, Poem #2

During this revision I decided to concentrate on line breaks and added some rhyming.  

 

Draft #2

Butter

Back

Breast

Free

Are the motions 

that mean so much to me!  

 

Just…

follow the black line,

then flip!  

And you’ll be fine!  

 

Swim fast!

You’ll have a blast!  

 

Not sure I’m the rhyming type of poet.  It’s hard!  To be honest, I’m not a fan of this try.  

7 thoughts on “Revision, Poem #2

  1. I can’t rhyme for the life of me – well, I can rhyme, I have a hard time writing a rhyming poem! I much prefer the free verse – BUT, as you remind me, we owe to kids to step out of our comfort zones and try! Thanks for sharing!

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